Thank you for this great opportunity. I'm an emerging writer who will pitch my first #YA novel at #PitMad. I've written three pitches for my story. I will appreciate your comments and suggestions. Regards, Lou
KARATE KID x YAQUI DELGADO
To escape a bully, STEM whiz Cindy joins a mysterious school inside a coal mine, but her rivalry with Melissa for a dream job in the genetics lab brings familiar terror and challenges her self-respect. #PracPit #YA #CON #AD
To escape a bully, STEM prodigy Cindy joins a school secreted in a coal mine by a fugitive scientist. But to get her dream job in the genetics lab, Cindy must overcome her terror of Melissa, who will do anything to get the job and Cindy's boyfriend. #PracPit #YA #CON #AD
Bullied STEM whiz Cindy runs away to join other prodigies at a mysterious school run by a fugitive geneticist in a coal mine. There she must compete with intimidating, win-at-all costs Melissa for a job in the genetics lab and the affections of Jeremy. #PracPit #YA #CON #AD
I really like the beginning of #3 and the end of #1. I don't want to throw a wrench in your pitches, but maybe it's worth considering.
STEM whiz Cindy escapes a bully when she joins other prodigies at a mysterious school run by a fugitive geneticist. But her rivalry with cutthroat Melissa for a dream internship in his lab brings a familiar terror she cannot run away from. #PitMad #YA #CON #AD