I hadn't totally refined these ideas yet, but would love the feedback!
My current pitches (for the same book):
•Cruel Prince×ACOTAR
A fae girl w/a human heart. A Seelie queen with a penchant for stealing mortals. And an Unseelie king who will have to give up his throne. Faye will have to unravel the dark legacy her father left behind if she wants to rescue her best friend.
•Cruel Prince × ACOTAR
When El is stolen by the Folk, Faye will have to pass through the veil - a longing she's always had, even knowing how wicked the fae can be. But Faye finds something else there: a dark legacy she'll have to unravel if she wants El back.
Hi Kelsey! My thoughts are meant to help, please ignore them if they do not. 1 I love the list of ingredients, but without an mc I'm not hooked in yet. Dark legacy doesn't really tell us what's going on with him. Why does he bf need rescuing? I don't know how the seelie queen and the unseelie king fit into Faye's life. Remember, a pitch is a 3 ingredient commercial. Mc, stakes,... 2 for this one I agree with everything Michael says. Hope this helps! Good luck! Jenn