The Castle of Lost Time is an adult fantasy novel with 3 POV characters. Here are my pitches:
When Elly's attempt to revive her husband invokes a deadly curse, their castle becomes a trap for unwary guests. Now a rogue teenage girl, a veteran assassin and his royal master must find a way out. The only problem: one of them has to die to save the others. #A #F
A noble brat in a cursed castle. A rogue teenage girl. A prince and an assassin on a murderous quest. The goddess of death will devour them all if one doesn't die to save the others. UPROOTED x WINTERNIGHT #A #F
The obvious problem is that I have too many characters. So in the first pitch, I'm tying to focus on the inciting incident and the stakes. The second is more of an overview - I don't know if it works.
Thanks for reading.
Just remember, the pitch doesn't have to encompass your book. It's like an ad. You don't see a list of ingredients for the reeses peanut butter cup. You only see someone enjoying the chocolate heaven! Give them one mc, stakes, and be super extremely specific. Hope that helps. You got some great feedback here already! Keep at it! Sounds like a terrific book! Jenn