Hi everyone! I have 3 Twitter pitches that I'd love feedback on for Pitmad. Thank you in advance!
1) SPIRITED AWAY + WICKED FOX
Taiwanese-American Sierra Li is a hulijing, a fox spirit. When her parents fall ill to a pandemic, the only way to cure them is to travel through the Underworld to bury the ashes of her grandmother, a legendary nine-tailed fox #PitMad #MG #Ownvoices
2) SPIRITED AWAY+DRAGONPEARL (RICK RIORDAN PRESENTS)
Bullied for:
Being Asian? Yup
Glasses? Yup
Being suspected for making everyone sick? Yup
Being a fox spirit? Yup
Being sent to the Chinese Underworld to save her parents? Uh-oh
3) SPIRITED AWAY+WICKED FOX
Time is running out for Sierra as she goes through the Chinese Underworld to save her parents & bury the ashes of her grandmother, a legendary nine-tailed fox. As time runs out, she loses her fox powers, her parents, AND her life. #PitMad #MG #Ownvoices
Sounds great!
#1: Love this one. I agree about cutting some of the extra words and seeing if there is a way to introduce her loss of powers & life if she fails.
#2: I love the tone of it, but I'm not sure it's quite as effective as the other ones. Maybe consider re-structuring it a bit. "Sierra Li is bullied for her Taiwanese heritage, her glasses, and her secret life as a fox spirit. When a pandemic strikes and her parents fall ill, only a trip through the Chinese underworld can save them." That's just a quick suggestion.
#3: The repeating of "time runs/running out" is a little distracting for me. Also, I think it needs a brief mention of her parents being ill to give it context.
Good luck!