@priyakavina Here are my thoughts. Overall, I would say to be wary of movie-poster style pitches. While they can make you stand out in the feed, they tend to lack a cohesive sense of character or narrative. I want to see the main character, main conflict, and main stakes be clear, with the potential of adding rising stakes or some sense of character arc.

BLINDSPOT x ORPHAN BLACK

1:00 Kiara is on a plummeting cargo plane with no memory of how she got there

2:00 Rescue arrives

3:00 She's put in a white-walled room, and something about it feels familiar

Familiar isn't always a good thing. #PitDark #SFT #SFH

I like the times, especially 1:00 because it gives us character and situation and stakes. However the stakes go away when she is rescued a moment later, and after that it seems like the whole 1:00 situation isn't related to anything else in the pitch. I can't really tell what the main idea of the book is, except maybe to regain her memory? Which is a trope that might ward off some agents. I'd recommend building up the storyline more with each time point instead of throwing in disparate events and vaguely stating that "familiar could be bad" (as I'm not sure what to make of that). Shoot for concrete stakes, concrete goal.

THE 100 x BIOSPHERE 2

Who: Subject Bohemia

What: Prove humans can survive in a contained environment

Why: To make life on Mars possible

How: Sustain 20,000 human subjects in the Dome

Problem: Subjects are tempted to open the airlock, a fatal scenario on Mars.

This isn't working for me, as there's no main character and no clear plot or stakes, and I'm just asking too many questions (what do you mean by contained environment? why would people open the airlock? what's the Dome?). It also doesn't set itself apart as much as the previous one.