My book has 2 POV characters, so I've approached the story from a couple different angles. All critiques and advice are greatly appreciated. I'd also love to know which angle creates the most intriguing pitch/which approach I should focus on. Thanks!
1. Kiara Desai was conceived naturally, a felony amidst the War on Genes. When her parents are killed, she becomes hell-bent on finding the murderer. As she corners her suspect, key moments of her memory are obliterated, including the knowledge of her parents’ killer.#SFT #PitDark
2. Hem has a secret. Revealing it means saving his best friend, but sentencing his community to death. Hiding it means genocide for an entire class. The ticking time bomb is in his hands; the only way to defuse it is to make a choice - before someone makes it for him.#T #PitDark
3. R. PLAYER ONE x WOOL
Hem relies VR to combat cabin fever, but it isn’t enough to keep him from wondering about the Outside, a world he's never seen. His curiosity gets him marked for expulsion, a bitter sweet punishment - until he learns he's not being sent Outside.#SPEC #PitDark
4. Kiara Desai is on a plummeting cargo plane. On it is a data drive worth killing for. Now, the pilot is dead, the plane is fractured, the drive is gone, and Kiara witnesses it all. The worst part is she can't remember what she doing on that plane in the first place #PitDark #PH #T
Thanks for the feedback! Yes, Kiara's parents die as a result of a hate crime against illegally born children. I tried to imply that. Would you recommend specifically stating that?