Hi everyone. This is my first #PitMad. Thank you so much for all your help. This experience could be daunting, but the prep for it so far has been great. I'm only working with 2 pitches this time around.
1.
Up to her Rolex in debt, Victoria inherits her estranged mother’s restaurant. The valet’s always drunk, the chef conspires with an imaginary friend, and the manager wants to backstab Victoria with a steak knife.
If they weren’t her siblings, she’d axe them.
*NOTE - originally for the last line I had 'she'd fire them' but someone earlier mentioned it wasn't strong enough to keep up with the first paragraph. Thoughts on this? Thanks!
2.
Thrown together by tragedy, five feuding siblings attempt to raise their dead mother’s restaurant from the grave.
When they discover their mother was oven mitts deep in criminal dealings, hangry customers are the least of their worries.
I really appreciate all your help in advance! Good luck to everyone!
I wouldn't worry about comps. They can be useful if snappy enough, but they're needed most in a query.
It's my first time critiquing this, so I'm coming at it with fresh eyes--and I have nothing to offer. That revision shines. The first had a middle-grade feel to it, so I'm glad you upgraded to the modifiers for the siblings!