Hello, all. Thanks much for any feedback on the pitches below.
1.
16yo Rae receives a favor and the charge to pay it forward. Her ensuing acts of kindness lead to a possible romance, a sea of Post-it–noted gratitude, and an epic scavenger hunt around town, but will it be enough for her to forgive herself for her father’s death? #PitMad #YA #CON
2.
Reeling over her dad’s death, 16yo Rae escapes into the ’80s rock songs that soundtracked her childhood. As the “Owner of a Lonely Heart,” she’s quick to look totheatre-lover Mac to give her “Something to Believe In.” But will he turn out to be “Bad Medicine”? #PitMad #YA #CON
3.
ALL THE WAYS THE WORLD CAN END + HERE WE ARE NOW Music—’80s rock—keeps 16yo Rae’s dad alive in her heart. To assuage her guilt over his death, she gathers a merry band of theatre geeks to pull off an epic sleep out for the Jon Bon Jovi Soul Foundation. #PitMad #YA #CON #LGBT
I also like #2 and #3 both. The suggested revise of #2 is good but I liked the original (even if it puts me in the minority, haha!). Well done. If you post any revisions here, I'll look them over so you can get a second pass--but I think you've got this in the bag either way!