Hi all! I have three pitches so far for my adult fantasy romance. There are different styles to look at and any advice is great! TIA!
(1)
When Ariadne, a victim of war, marries Azriel, his secrecy about his family bloodlines prompts suspicion. If she discovers the truth, she’ll leave and the daemons he’s trying to protect her from will finish what they started. #PitMad #A #R
(2)
Ariadne and Azriel have one thing in common: they’re victims of a war against daemons. After marrying, Ariadne’s curiosity about her husband’s bloodlines grows, but he’ll do anything to keep his secret. If he fails, he’ll lose her and the daemons will end them both. #PitMad #A #R
(3)
BLACK DAGGER BROTHERHOOD x RADIANCE
A brutal war. A loving marriage. A devastating family secret. If the truth is discovered, the marriage will end, and the war will be lost for Ariadne and Azriel. Can he keep her from learning the truth and save them both? #PitMad #A #R
Alright! I tweaked them all a bit... how do these sound?
When Ariadne, a victim of the war against daemons, marries Azriel, secrecy about his bloodlines prompts suspicion. If she learns the truth, she’ll leave him, but without his protection, the daemons will be able to finish what they started. #PitMad #A #R
Ariadne and Azriel have one thing in common: they’re hunted by daemons and he has to keep her safe. After marrying, Ariadne’s curiosity about his bloodlines grows. He’ll do anything to keep his secret. If he fails, she’ll leave him and they’ll both be dead. #PitMad #A #R
BLACK DAGGER BROTHERHOOD x RADIANCE
A loving marriage. A devastating family secret. A brutal fight against daemons. If the truth is discovered, the marriage will end, and Ariadne and Azriel will be killed. Can he keep her from learning the truth and save them both? #PitMad #A #R