I have three pitches I think are finetuned. I'm trying to hit the book from three slightly different angles. Let me know what you think.
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Most girls would dream of moving to a horse farm.
Anna Ono is not most girls.
She misses city life and horses terrify her. It will take help from some new friends for this bicultural city girl to thrive in Kentucky. #PitMad #MG #CON #ND #IRMC
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Anna Ono is a bicultural Chicago girl. She DOES NOT want to move to a horse farm in KY. She expects to be scared of the horses and lonely. She finds: a pony she might like and diverse friends. Maybe country life won’t be so bad. #PitMad #MG #CON #ND #IRMC
Anna Ono’s ADHD gives her laser focus on what she cares about. Right now that’s NOT wanting to move to a horse farm in KY. This bicultural Chicago girl will have to find a new focus in order to thrive in the country. #PitMad #MG #CON #ND #IRMC
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Thanks for the comments! Ironically, #1, which you liked the least, has been the most liked other places I've asked about it :). Goes to show just how subjective this is. I'll definitely take your comments into account as I continue to rework the pitches before Thursday. I'm glad to know the ADHD pitch caught your attention. That's definitely one of the things that sets the book apart - that and Anna's bicultural identity.