I hadn't totally refined these ideas yet, but would love the feedback!
My current pitches (for the same book):
•Cruel Prince×ACOTAR
A fae girl w/a human heart. A Seelie queen with a penchant for stealing mortals. And an Unseelie king who will have to give up his throne. Faye will have to unravel the dark legacy her father left behind if she wants to rescue her best friend.
•Cruel Prince × ACOTAR
When El is stolen by the Folk, Faye will have to pass through the veil - a longing she's always had, even knowing how wicked the fae can be. But Faye finds something else there: a dark legacy she'll have to unravel if she wants El back.
•Cruel Prince×ACOTAR
A fae girl w/a human heart. A Seelie queen with a penchant for stealing mortals. And an Unseelie king who will have to give up his throne. Faye will have to unravel the dark legacy her father left behind if she wants to rescue her best friend. <Like Jen says, cool ingredients, but there's plenty of book-specific (confusing) name-dropping, and the conflict itself sounds run-of-the-mill. I'd focus on Faye from the get-go rather than all these other characters, make her adventure more specific and maybe note the world or magic system if it's unique.
•Cruel Prince × ACOTAR
When El is stolen by the Folk, Faye will have to pass through the veil - a longing she's always had, even knowing how wicked the fae can be. < this part can probably be more succinct while also being clearer. "When her BFF is stolen by the Fair Folk, Faye will have to enter their world... where she does [X]" You can cut the longing in place of better explaining the legacy and specific adventure. But Faye finds something else there: a dark legacy she'll have to unravel if she wants El back. < Again, too vague.